intro to revision

In this piece the original assignment was to make a connection to identity and what identity is in general. I choose my identity essay because I feel that I did good on this assignment but I always say why say “why settle for good when you can have great.” So I just though if there is a way I could improve myself why not take the opportunity. Some of my strengths in this paper I felt were when I talked about what identity. I feel this excerpt is a good example “A person creates his or her own identity by choosing different characteristics like clothing, personal habits, mannerisms even your name.” One of my weaker parts of the essay I feel I began to get really unorganized and off topic. I feel that in this excerpt it show some of my poor parts of this essay “It’s strange to think that someone’s identity can be stolen and it can be a big deal.” After re-reading my essays and the comments from my professors I feel that this excerpt shows where I can make improvements.